Safety Program excerpt from Construction Agreement

Construction SiteThis is an excerpt from my company’s construction contract safety policy, likely written by engineers and non-English speakers in Thailand. There was an attempt to “write like a lawyer”–the results were less than ideal.

Lesson 1: Use clear language. If you need to re-read a sentence or paragraph to understand it, it still needs work. Keep it simple.

Lesson 2: When you define a term (see the final paragraph), use it correctly (“JSA” instead of “SJA”).

Lesson 3: Using all caps on defined terms clogs up readability. Change these to regular roman type.

Redline:

Redline--Safety Program

Finished product below.

Redline (rev)--Safety Program

Scoreboard: 249 words reduced to 210 (-39). And much clearer.

If you notice anything else, leave a comment.

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